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Posted by: rads in fable, verse

An entry to the Totally Optional prompts. You may visit here for a short introduction to this piece on my other blog.

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au·bade

1. A song or instrumental composition concerning, accompanying, or evoking daybreak.
2. A poem or song of or about lovers separating at dawn.

[Origin: Late 17th century, French, from Old French albade, from Old Provençal albada, from alba, dawn, aubade, from Latin.]

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Stay.

Stay
Just a bit longer, stay
I want to kiss you once more

The night as a witness to our desire
Hush,
Close your eyes,
Can you feel me?
Like I did just hours ago

In the silence of the darkness
Your breath as my beacon
I caress you with my fingertips

Stay
Just a bit longer
Make love to me once more

Brushing wavy tendrils away
Your stubble grazes my chin
A passion on a sway
Yet again
Your lips cradled in mine

In the crescendo of our heartbeats
Your voice as my refuge
I echo you with my eyes

Stay
Just a bit longer, stay
I want to kiss you once more

The night’s growing old
Dawn’s stealing quietly through
My spine feels a cold
Hold on, don’t let go

In the warmth of this raging amour
My dream as my anchor
I shut my eyes tight

As you must know
I wake with the dawn,
Poof!
There you go.

Stay
Just a bit longer
Make love to me once more

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37 comments so far

1

Rads, I *do* love the way you subtly word even the raunchiest of emotions – in a completely non-tacky and sweet way – you do have a gift with words (at the risk of repeating myself!)

February 11th, 2009 at 4:15 am

2

Very well written!

February 11th, 2009 at 6:03 am

3

*shudder* Almost real! :)

-g

February 11th, 2009 at 7:12 am

4

gauri: 'almost' being the key word eh? :)

naren: :)

Shreya: Dear girl, thanks for repeating, I could use that! :) Not sure about how much of a gift this is…

February 11th, 2009 at 8:13 am

Kiran

5

Enjoyed very much your archives. Your words flow just as others have mentioned.
This poem is cleverly done with metaphors placed where one usually does not see. Can I ask you to explain certain lines and how you meant them? Unsure about the usage of “beacon” and “echo with eyes” phrases. I hope you don’t mind me asking.
K

February 11th, 2009 at 6:09 am

6

Kiran: I apologise. Your comment got into 'spam' I rescued it and approved, but yet I don't see it. Now I've lost it completely. In any case, here's your clarification you asked.
"Your breath as my beacon" – Beacon is a shining light cutting through fog. Light is heat, warmth. I hope that was clearer?
"I echo you with my eyes" – as in what she sees in his eyes, she echos it, reflects it. I could've used 'mirror' but I liked this. It has a literal and figurative meaning to it.

Hope that helped? Thanks for your kind words. :)

February 11th, 2009 at 12:08 pm

7

i may be requoting shreya here, but then fantastic wordplay!

February 11th, 2009 at 4:36 pm

8

Sigh

February 11th, 2009 at 5:42 pm

Nandini Vishwanath

9

Its beautiful :) And bookmarked.

February 11th, 2009 at 6:26 pm

Ofira Sephiroth

10

Very nicely written..sensual

February 12th, 2009 at 4:56 am

11

Trust the French to come up with something like this…

Trust you do do a good job at it :-))) Excellent !!!

February 12th, 2009 at 5:23 am

12

Almost dreamlike, but a very realistic scenario.

February 12th, 2009 at 7:13 am

sweet talking guy

13

The night is never long enough…

February 12th, 2009 at 1:21 pm

gautami tripathy

14

Elemental..

February 12th, 2009 at 1:34 pm

15

This sung itself to me..

If it were set to tune, I'd play it..you know when. :-)

February 12th, 2009 at 2:18 pm

16

The nights that end so soon… Good capture…

February 12th, 2009 at 7:00 pm

17

Okay, I'm going to take a cold shower, now!

Great job evoking the love!

February 12th, 2009 at 10:44 pm

18

Thanks Linda. :-)

February 13th, 2009 at 12:44 am

19

They sure do. Thank you.

February 13th, 2009 at 12:44 am

20

aw CW. :-) Doing well?

February 13th, 2009 at 12:45 am

21

Gautami, enthrall is good. Thanks for commenting.

February 13th, 2009 at 12:52 am

22

:) Thanks for commenting.

February 13th, 2009 at 12:54 am

23

Yeah, I meant it as a dream. An aubade of a woman asking her lover not to leave in her dream.

February 13th, 2009 at 12:55 am

24

The French are a fine lot aren't they? Thanks, that's a huge compliment. :-)

February 13th, 2009 at 12:55 am

25

Thank you Ofira. I liked yours too! :-)

February 13th, 2009 at 12:56 am

26

:)

February 13th, 2009 at 12:56 am

27

Thatsall? Sigh? :)

February 13th, 2009 at 12:57 am

28

Thanks Max. Words give so much of freedom to explore.

February 13th, 2009 at 12:57 am

29

This is plain AWESOME!! U have a briliant poet in u apart from the engrossing story-teller! (I said the same thing on 'tenneling thru' too! So excuse me for repeating myself!) :)

February 13th, 2009 at 2:34 am

30

Four days early, and not feeble. :-) Good one

February 13th, 2009 at 5:37 am

31

bpsk! It's soooooo good to hear from you! :-)

February 13th, 2009 at 11:41 am

32

Stitha: lol, I'll interpret it as that you're speechless and stuck on the same line? :-)
Thanks, am meddling around with words and thoughts..

February 13th, 2009 at 11:42 am

Praveen

33

Why not start poetry than short stories??? :)

February 14th, 2009 at 4:47 pm

34

lol, too early Praveen :)

February 14th, 2009 at 7:54 pm

35

Very lovely. Going to set it to music? I *love* the refrain – it makes the aubade.

February 17th, 2009 at 1:31 pm

36

Wouldn't be a bad idea to set it to music right? Would you? :-)

February 17th, 2009 at 2:05 pm

37

ah a beautiful way of describing a wet dream :)

but seriously – ur a great writer. this poem is awesome! i totally go with the very first comment :)

February 21st, 2009 at 7:12 am

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